I am a panther stalking my prey as subtle as the wind
I wonder if i'm being watched spied on in the night
I hear explosions as I run as fast as I can
I want to dash away but I cannot because i'm trapped
I am scared and worried for my life
I pretend to be a robot hovering in space
I feel hot like i'm on a volcano
I worry that i'm going to slip and fall down 100 ft
I cry as my house explodes
I am a dragon breathing molten lava fire out of my mouth
I understand complicated problems
I say mean things in the heat of the situation
I dream of money raining from the sky
I try to hold on as the rocket accelerates into space
I hope to be immortal and to drift across the sky
I am a snake slithering across the dry arid landscape
I really like how you stayed with one personality. also how you were different animals. :)
ReplyDeleteSo good I don't have a helpful comment. Keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteHi Clifford Devlin here really like all your describing you might want to ad some fool stops but otherwise very good but ad a reflection.
ReplyDeletehi im Charlie from Kaingaroa school in the Far North im also a year 5 and a boy. I like how it escalates in the space of one line and it gets so dramatic. But you could add more vocab. :)
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